The next draft has gone very far. I have some new concepts that I would like to discuss in the statement other than some of the ones stated previously, and I also have a newly revised picture. Although I cannot post the picture because of reasons too complex to go into at the moment.
The new things that I am going to add in would be information on why the terrorists "chose" that path, bestowed upon me by this little article here, and more information on a successful choice to save the capitol on the well known flight of "Let's Roll". This information will probably replace whatever I was going to talk about with the people in the recovery effort, because what I was talking about in the last post really struck me as a very ignorant post, and I do not want to be the one suffering ignorance.
My thesis statement is also now revised to "The incident involving 9-11 is connected to the quote by the choices made in multiple situations by various people around the world, including the middle east and the ruling religious and political leaders governing the would be terrorists, the heroic passengers of flight 93, and the terrorists themselves on the two planes that hit the Twin Towers."
This revision of everything occurred because, first of all, its was only a rough outline, and second of all, I want to have this art piece be more positive and pro-America, and not to make it seem like I am anti-America in any way. It was also changed because I have only recently come across some new thoughts such as the article about why people become terrorists, and the leaders who manipulate the correct messages of various significant texts to bend people to their will.
That was a quick overview of the changes made in my artists statement. Have a good day.
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